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Jack Foster May 3 2008, 1:46am


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Hello everyone,

I have just recently finished the trailer to my machinima series that I plan on making soon. I've spent much time planning it all out from the very beginning so any feedback any of you have is welcome.

The Codex series was one of my inspirations while first coming up with but I tried my best to not copy it to the point where the characters seem like just a rip off of The Codex/The Heretic.

FileFront: http://files.filefront.com/Trust+trailerwm...;/fileinfo.html

HaloTube: http://www.halotube.org/m/view/1080/trust-trailer/

YouTube: http://youtube.com/watch?v=yHqwk6P3PuE

... Whichever you prefer.

Enjoy, thank you.

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Gundam114 May 3 2008, 7:53am


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I don't think a rip-off is the problem.

You need to work more on your editing, and did you give a review of your film before you sent it out? Audio is Desynced at the end, you keep looping over and over again with the same audio cues from garageband.

I'll keep it simple, don't use a trailer made up of loops, those kind of trailers suck. Alot of machinimas use professional trailer music during their trailer, some are exceptions because they actually have the music composed for the trailer, but its not loops. You need to work on timing, and really think about the process during editing.

I gotta say, right now it looks pretty bad. But, keep working on your editing and you will eventually pick it up.

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Zukan May 3 2008, 9:13am


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I didn't have a problem with the loops, at least you're not looping Lux Aeterna over and over again like 90% of all the other trailers do. And I think only people familiar with Garageband are going to get picky about the music.
It seems like a good start, my advice would be to ask for help from more experienced machinimators/actors from now and on. It kinda looked like you were filming on your own because a lot of the characters just stood completely still and let themselves die.
   
 
Gundam114 May 3 2008, 9:43am


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Loops drive me mad if they go on and on.

This was something common in The Heretic and The Codex with me to some extent (No offense Nerrolken).

but I would suggest that you get yourself a midi-keyboard, it'll be worth its money.

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Jack Foster May 3 2008, 11:03am


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I actually did have a little professional help with this and he was the one who said to have the music like that.

I never expected it to be great considering this is literally the first story-based machinima I ever made.

Thanks for the comments! I appreciate it.

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The audio is off at the end. Minus 3 points. That gives you a grand total of 5/10.

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